Four charged in bogus-check scam

Four charged in bogus-check scam
By Keith Epps
November 9th, 2009

Four people who were cashing phony checks were arrested over the weekend in Fredericksburg. The Spotsylvania and Stafford county sheriffs worked together to catch the criminals. The criminals used phony $100 American Express cards to buy various inexpensive iterms then would pocket the change left on the cards. The criminals were caught at the Walmart and were taken into custody. All of the suspects face numerous charges including forgery, passing forged documents, and other charges. The suspects were places in the Rappahannock Regional Jail.

Critique
This article goes into alot of detail about how exatcly the criminals committed the crime which may lead to a copying of the crime. The story should include less details about how the crime was done and more on the consequences for committing the crime in order to prevent a repeat of the offense.